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Author: Jan
ASL Info:    19/female/PA
Elite Ratio:    4 - 227 /251 /39
Words: 87
Class/Type: Poetry /Venting
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... when you know that you'll never get the truth out of them. Painful lead-ons and hints that hurt. Like a puzzle you cant complete because of a few missing pieces. You know how it feels.


There are things you
don't tell me.
Things you dare not speak
of in my presence.
As obvious as it is,
is it just as obvious that your secrets
bruise me inside?
Your unfinished sentences and
quick subject changes
yet you act on them constantly.
You ask me what is wrong.
I dare not speak.
Furthur you press,
the very thing I abstain from.
The matter is closed.
Respect my silence and
leave me be.

Your contradictions speak
for themselves.

Submitted on 2006-12-28 22:35:58     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  This is a very good piece, I have to admit I liked it a lot. It was very well written. I can relate to the situation being discribed. It's hard to tell the other person how you're feeling sometimes and when you do it either causes an arguement or they pretend to care when in reality they don't. It's hard to deal with sometimes. I go through it all the time. I wouldn't change anything about this piece I think it's fine just the way it is, you did a great job. Well done :).

| Posted on 2006-12-29 00:00:00 | by my_worst_fear85 | [ Reply to This ]

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