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    dots Submission Name: Abusedots
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    Author: bloodydreamer27
    Elite Ratio:    2.19 - 54/130/78
    Words: 136
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    Description:
       I wrote this last night, cause i was thinking about if my dad found out that I was bi, and this just popped into my head. I know its not that good, and some parts dont rhyme right but i was tired & kinda depressed. So just tell me what you think.
    Also, this didn't actually happen to me. My dad has threatened to beat me, and has almost punched me in the face several times but he hasn't yet. I'm just waiting for him to finally snap and do it so i can get away from him.


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    She can't take anymore,
    She's got to get away.
    She can't live with getting beaten,
    Almost every single day.

    She wears long sleeves and jackets,
    To cover the scars and bruises.
    No matter what she does or says,
    She always feels like a nuisence.

    She loves her dad, but doesn't know,
    How much more her body can take.
    She wonders if the next time he hits her,
    If one of her bones will break.

    She wants to cry for help,
    But doesn't know what that will do.
    She's afraid that it wont do anything,
    And she'll get beaten even more by you.

    He found out about her girlfriend,
    So he took it to the extreme.
    And as she lay dying on the floor,
    She wishes that this is all just a dream.




    Submitted on 2006-12-29 12:35:08     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      this sounds like a shrink's analysis almost. only because Ive heard them say stuff like this before.

    I really hope that you never have to experience your parents hitting you or any other kind of abuse.

    especially because of a stupid reason like not being able to accpet who you are.

    This was an ok write, its stanzas are short and to the point, I can feel the emotions that you must have been going thru
    | Posted on 2007-01-11 00:00:00 | by itsjustme22 | [ Reply to This ]
      wow. intense.
    | Posted on 2007-01-07 00:00:00 | by rocker5871 | [ Reply to This ]
      if your father hits you then you need to get someone to help you. thats honestly the saddest story ive ever heard someone tell. your actually really brave to tell and let this out. i cant tell yo i noe wat your going through but you should get someone to tlak to. and being bi isnt bad. im bi dont change for your dad. becuz of the wa he treats you is wong. plez help yourself and get some helpdont let him take your lyfe away.
    | Posted on 2006-12-29 00:00:00 | by bettybabe13 | [ Reply to This ]
      I'm sorry that ur father's abusive, it's not ur fault that u r bi. u didn't chose to be, u just r, and the next time he hits u call the cops cause u don't deserve to be hit, no one does. i do very much like this piece cause i can feel the pain and anguish that ur going through, but don't take it anymore, please.
    | Posted on 2006-12-29 00:00:00 | by Lil gal | [ Reply to This ]


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