LIFE is Just a Dream...

Author: Kasper187 ASL Info:    24 m Texas Elite Ratio:    2.03 - 71 /64 /43 Words: 112

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LIFE is Just a Dream...

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Life is just a dream Fallen into a shallow soul Take the light from me Shadows devour my heart whole Life is just a dream Wake me from pain so mine Take the hopelessness from me Release me from Hate inside Life is but a dream No one to awaken Alone in deep sorrow Filled with pain never mistaken Life is but a dream Not finding a way to feel Search seems never ending Looking for whats real Life is my deep sorrow For the world so far away From where we need to be Take me from the pain Of this life, Thats only just a dream...

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this is a very good poem, i can tell it came from the heart, good job ^_^

| Posted on 2007-02-17 00:00:00 | by Midnight Rain | [ Reply to This ]

very sad and depressing...which was your aim, so good job. you have a good way of describing the bleakness of it all. i agree, this is an excellent piece....except now i'm all depressed!! michelle

| Posted on 2007-01-26 00:00:00 | by whirl | [ Reply to This ]

i really like this poem. the emotions in it are so sad and yet so true that it just makes it that much better. this is an excellent poem. joanna

| Posted on 2007-01-06 00:00:00 | by heartless_ | [ Reply to This ]

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