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LIFE is Just a Dream...

Author: Kasper187
ASL Info:    24 m Texas
Elite Ratio:    2.03 - 71 /64 /43
Words: 112
Class/Type: Poetry /Depressed
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LIFE is Just a Dream...

Life is just a dream
Fallen into a shallow soul
Take the light from me
Shadows devour my heart whole

Life is just a dream
Wake me from pain so mine
Take the hopelessness from me
Release me from Hate inside

Life is but a dream
No one to awaken
Alone in deep sorrow
Filled with pain never mistaken

Life is but a dream
Not finding a way to feel
Search seems never ending
Looking for whats real

Life is my deep sorrow
For the world so far away
From where we need to be
Take me from the pain Of this life,
Thats only just a dream...

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  this is a very good poem, i can tell it came from the heart, good job ^_^
| Posted on 2007-02-17 00:00:00 | by Midnight Rain | [ Reply to This ]
  very sad and depressing...which was your aim, so good job. you have a good way of describing the bleakness of it all.
i agree, this is an excellent piece....except now i'm all depressed!!
| Posted on 2007-01-26 00:00:00 | by whirl | [ Reply to This ]
  i really like this poem. the emotions in it are so sad and yet so true that it just makes it that much better. this is an excellent poem. joanna
| Posted on 2007-01-06 00:00:00 | by heartless_ | [ Reply to This ]

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