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    dots Submission Name: black tearsdots
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    Author: gloomyanddoomy
    ASL Info:    17,female
    Elite Ratio:    1.05 - 81/426/527
    Words: 341
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 724
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 2148



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    dotsblack tearsdots
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    Everybody thinks they
    are the perfect pair
    A simple girl with long hair
    And a preppy boy
    that seems to care
    Everybody thinks
    they are so great
    They never fight,
    she never cries
    Their love never dies
    Or does it...

    Black tears
    and hidden fears
    Long nights
    with painful fights
    Bruised thighs
    and black eyes
    Another night,
    another fight
    More booze
    results in another bruise
    This is their perfect life

    She's so happy with him
    That's how its always been
    They are so great together
    They'll be with
    each other forever
    Everybody wants to be like them
    Everybody wants to be perfect
    Thing's arent always as they appear...

    Black tears and hidden fears
    Long nights
    with painful fights
    Bruised thighs
    and black eyes
    Another night,
    another fight
    More booze results
    in another bruise
    This is their perfect life

    A perfect life
    Hers could end
    with a knife
    Everynight she is crying
    With every bruise
    she is slowly dying
    Black tears
    and hidden fears
    She flinches at his touch
    Her pain is just too much
    This is her perfect life

    Black tears
    and hidden fears
    Long nights
    with painful fights
    Bruised thighs
    and black eyes
    Another night,
    another fight
    more booze results
    in another bruise
    this is their perfect life

    Finally she decides
    she wont take it anymore
    The cops are
    breaking down the door
    Her boyfriend
    puts a gun to her head
    "Another step
    and she is dead"
    Black tears and hidden fears
    "miss are you okay?"
    Her boyfriend
    lays still beside her
    She will live another day





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    ||| Comments |||
      this brings back memories of one of my ex-boyfriends...all of my friends though that we were perfect and he used to hurt me physically and when we were around other people...i would put up this facade that everything was great...because I was afraid that people would find out that I was in that kind of relationship and staying with the guy and not trying to get out and think less of me...but you know it only took one time...one good fight to make me leave. I finally did...the day he smacked my best friend...that was the end of that relationship... i really like this...favorites....kisses~Ashley~
    | Posted on 2007-01-02 00:00:00 | by redeemer | [ Reply to This ]


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