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in the end it all fades to black


Author: gloomyanddoomy
ASL Info:    17,female
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Words: 142
Class/Type: Poetry /Love
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in the end it all fades to black



I see trees of green,
red roses too
I see them bloom
for me and you
And I say to myself
What wonderful world

I see skies of blue
and clouds of white
Bright sunny days,
dark sacred nights
And I think to myself
What a wonderful world

The colors of the rainbow
are so pretty in the skies
Are also on the faces
of people walking by
I see friends
shaking hands saying
How do you do?
They're really saying
I love you
but it then it all fades to gray
and we are all complete stranger's again
and you know me through
and where still together
untill you say good bye youll be back
and i find you with her
then it all turns to black instead of gray




Submitted on 2006-12-29 21:53:44     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  sorry bout my typos, im using a gammy keyboard, im not at my usual comp rofl im in scotland :P madness xxx

~lou~
| Posted on 2006-12-30 00:00:00 | by elseibi | [ Reply to This ]
  wow, ice usage of the other pem there well done, lulling th reader into a relaxed false sence of security there and thn blindsiding them with that ending. well done. xx

~lou~
| Posted on 2006-12-29 00:00:00 | by elseibi | [ Reply to This ]


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