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    dots Submission Name: You must be talenteddots
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    Author: bleeding_sin
    ASL Info:    16/F/OR
    Elite Ratio:    3.03 - 54/68/57
    Words: 114
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
    Total Views: 513
    Average Vote:    3.0000
    Bytes: 686



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       12/19/06


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    dotsYou must be talenteddots
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    You must be talented
    To do this to me
    One though of you
    It sets me off
    I wounder how you do this
    I never know

    It must be your passion
    You use when you kiss
    The love you poor out
    When we touch
    Caution you use
    When we go to far

    Then I think you must be talented
    To do this to me
    Pooring out your love
    I think to myself this can't be

    But with every touch
    It becomes more real
    Every kiss sends a shiver down my spine
    And then
    Our hearts beat as one
    Then I think
    You must be talented
    To do this to me




    Submitted on 2006-12-29 23:21:11     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      The idea is great...this line "You must be talented"... but the rest of the poem doesn't stand up to the...almost sublime sound of this sentence... I'd put more abstract feeling into it (and wacht out for the spelling).
    | Posted on 2006-12-30 00:00:00 | by Non-Sens-Uality | [ Reply to This ]


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