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    dots Submission Name: dappled nature stalks the winddots

    Author: blackbird
    ASL Info:    31/male/reykjavik iceland
    Elite Ratio:    2.35 - 194/328/300
    Words: 253
    Class/Type: Prose/Depressed
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    dotsdappled nature stalks the winddots

    these words so like a collage of ghosts
    suffer the blessed clouds and their horror
    and i once again
    tatterdemallion and waining
    grave my eyelashes
    like an island to your many

    the bruised orchid soul
    tranquil once removed
    braves the winter sun
    in fear of the sidewalks rough placid

    an ache that begins a sunrise retreating
    a boil or perhaps an invert heart
    let these birds upon your back remember
    soil is an earthy sort of haunt

    i am the blanket of these tears
    a resting orchard for the tortured
    blow kindly solid wind
    like an echo i become you

    my pyramid within
    why do you surrender
    shallow hearts make a mockery of children
    and fools out of sacred spaces

    i once remembered turning in like a leaf
    outside of understanding as i am now
    every breath was not a fresh repose
    but a mere draperie for happenstance

    let the cool waters be a nest for gentle lips
    perhaps in the absence of fluttered wings
    we can beseech the gentle insects
    chime a crater to your love

    i am seconds within this
    all filled with the silent pools of moon
    like a brave stone battles innocent moisture
    or an ash grove sleeves the holy

    i am the longing fingertips of wit
    that split the sky with odd whispers
    when i crush the pearly wasted years
    they are a simple shadow in my palm

    as of yet
    i am still becoming everything completely

    Submitted on 2006-12-30 03:48:23     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Very unique the way you draw from the many parts of nature and turn them into something not just about nature but blended with your soul / inner-self. Very nice.
    | Posted on 2007-01-03 00:00:00 | by isis_lenore | [ Reply to This ]
      this sounds so beautiful i can see it published. i love poetry about nature with a bit darkness in there..it brings a great feeling of lift and great imagery, im going to add this to my favorites
    | Posted on 2007-01-03 00:00:00 | by Ani | [ Reply to This ]

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