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    dots Submission Name: my island is a teacup that my eyelids are escapingdots

    Author: blackbird
    ASL Info:    31/male/reykjavik iceland
    Elite Ratio:    2.35 - 194/328/300
    Words: 231
    Class/Type: Prose/Misc
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    dotsmy island is a teacup that my eyelids are escapingdots

    let us suppose in this instant
    that our dreams could ignite the sky
    inner demons wrapping swollen prophets
    in their wake
    how many loving teardrops could we brave

    if only towards the inner heart
    could guilty songbirds spill and fret
    a love like any other pours so fraile
    belief turned stammered from regret

    i paint a sunken world
    so unlike a cadenced raven pouring
    from our lips and meager feet
    a circus of unkempt blood and hair

    a mask of tortured soil
    faint bells and ghoulish thunder
    i make you like i made the rest
    the many are yet poorly blessed
    and a mind rarely understands its own death
    the way an autumn storm is like a bone

    rippled and pollished like sadness
    wrapped in youth
    we forcibly confront the ghosts of ourselves
    a fury like a hungry bell
    soundless in mountains of memory

    why must we retreat the stoic mind
    a living trinity of wonder
    closed as if carressing the dawn
    with fingers made of straw

    bleed me and let me float
    i am within this yet without
    you and i are always the same
    tiny fragments of the heart

    i am the interior magnet of emotion
    bored and thrusting nightshades
    at the deadly path
    clothe me with your silence
    and solitude

    i am the burning
    romantic forest of deceit

    Submitted on 2006-12-30 05:50:14     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      "i am the burning
    romantic forest of deceit"

    you are the vampire of my darkest mind playin gup the truest thoughts and unspoken wonders that seperate us from the common flock

    damn good write

    | Posted on 2007-03-22 00:00:00 | by in shadow | [ Reply to This ]
      Thatís good, have to hand it to you, if just one little tear can be drawn out of me today, I have to commend your talent, So I say, damn your good. Smiles. I still live, not as stone and wood yay.
    | Posted on 2006-12-31 00:00:00 | by Andz | [ Reply to This ]
      wow...this was interesting to say the least, with a vey odd title
    still, if you can catch me off gaurd it must be very good
    i like this =]
    | Posted on 2006-12-30 00:00:00 | by dark lover | [ Reply to This ]

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