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    dots Submission Name: Meant To Bedots
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    Author: Latin King
    ASL Info:    31/M/Los Angeles
    Elite Ratio:    2.39 - 104/232/145
    Words: 209
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
    Total Views: 795
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       Something that I turned into a rap song.

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    Under Arkitect, look in the music pages.

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    dotsMeant To Bedots
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    They say some people are,
    Meant to survive,
    And everything else in-between,
    Is meant to die!

    My number one motivation,
    Is the anger that I carry within,
    Gave my thoughts some resuscitation,
    So I can finally win,
    Victory over sin,
    Humans vs. machine,
    In a distant future,
    Where people are most likely,
    In-between.

    Meant just to die,
    Can't deny the agony and stress,
    That I carry inside,
    Credibility to the side,
    I lived an artificial life,
    Everything moving around me;
    Was lived in plain lies,
    Leaving my throat laced to a knife.

    Everywhere around me,
    Pours with bad luck,
    So ultimately,
    My goal is to inherit the tough,
    Can't quite die,
    Cause I'm meant to spread myself,
    My reality is wealth,
    Investing time to succeed,
    Many people before me,
    Lived a criminal Spree.

    Just to live fancy,
    I'm taking all my chances,
    This poetry was meant for me,
    Upgrading to classy,
    Like it was meant to be.

    This life was meant for me,
    Criminally destined to be free,
    Spiritually,
    Come tough to complete the enough,
    Like I'm nutritioned by pedigree,
    With words that burn you
    At a third degree,
    Successful in my lifetime,
    Like it was meant to be.




    Submitted on 2006-12-31 03:17:52     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      the flow was even enough. well done on that part. i dont agree with parts of this though. im just not agreeable or something IDK

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    | Posted on 2011-03-30 00:00:00 | by chiatealover | [ Reply to This ]
      I dont know some parts were choppy but I think it flowed ok I loved the meaning. Your second verse is my favorite. Very well done.

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    | Posted on 2006-12-31 00:00:00 | by Amanda Lynn | [ Reply to This ]
      This was pretty good but i can't agree with "jackz" flow was overall pretty good but there points in that piece where the flow is throwen off other than it was really good and it some great points.

    well hit me up

    max a.k.a lil' mix
    | Posted on 2006-12-31 00:00:00 | by theman | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow this is amazing, has a great flow to it very catching, had me wanting more even tho i read it to the very end. I like I like

    !*jackie *!
    | Posted on 2006-12-31 00:00:00 | by jackz | [ Reply to This ]


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