Description: This is about a lot of things. Love, loss, life in general. Sometimes things may seem hard and we might not always know why, but you've got to keep going. Though what's in your cup might taste bitter to you now, if you're willing to stick it out, if it's worth that much to you, someday you could have something really good, and you'll be glad that you endured.
The wine is bitter
But I continue to drink
Burning my throat
The source of much pain
I continue to drink
Hoping it to turn sweet
My stomach turns
I am forced to my knees
The wine is still bitter
But I continue to drink
Breathing is difficult
My heart is in a vice
It grows dark all around
Nothing is fine
The wine tastes of hemlock
But I continue to drink
Growing colder
Dread settles in
Colder still
Death looms over me
Growing frightened
But still I drink
Slowly dying
But I continue to drink
Hoping it will improve
I continue to drink
The wine is so bitter
But I must continue to drink
...Hmm..I must think about what to say here,indeed,because these words invoke much thought in my soul...They seem to stir something up..some feeling.I'm not sure what is though,but it is something good....*looks around and shakes head* Ignore my weird and meaningless rants,my friend!Antyways,I am attracted to these words of yours.I'm not to fond of some of your word choicings and word arrangings,but whatever it is I like it!I must say that I much like the repeatition of this phrase : "But I continue to drink".I noticed that in the second,fifth,and seventh time you repeated it,you used differnt differnt wordings.In my personal opinion,I believe that it would been just fine if you would've kept it the same.'Still','must',and 'will' are good words in the conveyience (sp?) of your main idea...In my opinoin,that is...Keeping that in mind,I like how the last line (last repeat also) is different.."I MUST"...I like that,but I really think that "I WILL" would be better...Over all,I really like this.Your thought upon how life is like a glass of wine,(bitter at first but sweetens in time), is well illustrated here and good words and good taste.Your imagery is also VERY nice and aiding towards the peice itself...Well,gonna leave you alone now since I've probabley annoyed you much.Happy New Years and God bless! - <3 Lindel
Submission Name: Bitter Wine
