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    dots Submission Name: Sunrisedots
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    Author: Twice
    Elite Ratio:    4 - 71/82/52
    Words: 59
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsSunrisedots
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    Blood pumps through my viens
    like guttered rain
    mud
    scum
    flood like tribal drums,
    the air saturated
    with rythem
    Lay your fingers on the pulse
    of the energy surround
    electric lights fight
    against
    the aura behind the sky
    the air now drunk with light
    a welcome sight
    good morning to all
    and goodbye to the night




    Submitted on 2006-12-31 15:42:01     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This is very interesting and viewed and expressed from the alternate or other side of the coin. For the manner in which you have provided the poetic expression of a sunrise I applaud this approach.

    It's non-conformist and shows an open minded approach to viewing things from all perspectives.

    Just a couple of typos to adjust, rhythm and veins.

    Very good poetic expression.
    | Posted on 2007-01-07 00:00:00 | by danativ | [ Reply to This ]
      I really have never thought of sunrise that way. Usually the poem talks about a peaceful new dawn breaking, but this really captures the energy of morning.
    | Posted on 2006-12-31 00:00:00 | by A.L. Beirce | [ Reply to This ]


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