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    dots Submission Name: Deceptive At Bestdots
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    Author: BestxDeceptions
    ASL Info:    22, Female, Kentucky.
    Elite Ratio:    2.23 - 25/66/49
    Words: 155
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 854
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1220



    Description:
       A collaboration with my lovely friend LocalFreak.

    Umm humm.

    He's amazing, and so is this poem, if I say so myself.

    Have fun.


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    dotsDeceptive At Bestdots
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    Tantalizing essence,
    of bitterness set free
    and lingering sensations
    of needing to be.

    Lost upon insipid tastes
    Existing, but unknown
    Defiled from what was wanted
    curs'd and alone
    Reminisce of the forgotten
    temptation of a sin
    all out, for the glory,
    or the punished within.

    Disgraced and subjegated
    Locked tight by pleasures key
    The highest peak drops lowest
    And gods drop to their knees

    The mountains they do swindle,
    as winds quickly deplete
    and your song, it is the beauty
    That the angels rightly sing.
    Though lowly, soft and deathly
    With dwindling decay
    The bellowing of sanctity
    Raped of its name

    Impressionable times,
    and regretful dreams
    Visions undiscovered
    will now be redeemed

    Will be held up aloft
    Above the purity of pain
    To settle inside once more
    To fill life's starkest page
    Repression is a sin inside,
    Melancholy lies
    Replenishing the life you knew
    Though you were,
    never,
    really,
    Alive!




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    ||| Comments |||
      your poems hit me hard, like wow, this kid knows her stuff. this one was pretty good. write on.
    </3 lisa
    | Posted on 2007-05-25 00:00:00 | by 777sacrites777 | [ Reply to This ]
      ....niiiice...incredible use of vocab.
    | Posted on 2007-01-01 00:00:00 | by Keller | [ Reply to This ]


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