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    Author: boo boo
    ASL Info:    18/f/mi
    Elite Ratio:    2.74 - 108/104/60
    Words: 46
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 691
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    Bytes: 299



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    One, Two
    What am i to do?
    Three, Four
    In your face i'll slam the door.
    Five, Six
    When did love enter into the mix?
    Seven, Eight
    You said you would have forever to wait.
    Nine, Ten
    When will you get the hint "never Again"?




    Submitted on 2006-12-31 16:27:54     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I know right some people just dont know when to fuc*k off.

    good poem its was ez and fun to read.
    | Posted on 2007-01-01 00:00:00 | by darkness | [ Reply to This ]
      It was..Indeed different. I thought it would have been better if it were counting down from ten if you know what I mean. Mind you, the rhyming and the whole scheme of the piece would be off. I think I just like the thought of counting down. Appropriate for the New Year.
    | Posted on 2006-12-31 00:00:00 | by Karios | [ Reply to This ]
      This was different, but it was good the only thing i i saw wrong was in ln4 "In your face i'll slam the door." you should put a comma in between face and slam or move "i'll slam the door." down beneath it. other than that it was good. hope to hear from you.
    | Posted on 2006-12-31 00:00:00 | by theman | [ Reply to This ]


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