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    dots Submission Name: New years eve...dots
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    Author: pixie_007
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    dotsNew years eve...dots
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    Her eyes stared at the rain falling from the sky
    Trying to focus on one raindrop when so many are falling...

    I cannot say and I may be wrong but it seems she's crying,
    Looking up into the sky as the rain pours down hard.
    With her thoughts lost in the rain the front door to the house stands ajar,
    Wake up sweet angel for the voices you hear are not to be acknowledged...

    I cannot tell and I might be wrong but it seems her mind's wandering away,
    Staring only at the road from which she once came.
    Closer to me yet farther from the truth she strays towards the dark,
    Wake up sweet angel for the people you see do not belong...

    Two days have slipped
    past Father Time...

    Its new years eve and there she stands still hoping on a better day,
    Four hours and twenty-eight minutes from now her life will find truth...
    Four hours and twenty-eight minutes from now she will know,
    Its new years eve and still she waits,but she already knows...

    Her eyes stared at the rain falling from the sky
    Trying to focus on one raindrop when so many are falling...

    "Which one am I?"




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      I have always loved the way you use symbolism and metphors. its been so long since i've read any of your poems. you still dont fail to inspire me.
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