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    dots Submission Name: Please Treat Me Rightdots
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    Author: Poetic_tragedy6
    ASL Info:    25/F/OR
    Elite Ratio:    2.65 - 114/155/74
    Words: 107
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
    Total Views: 578
    Average Vote:    4.0000
    Bytes: 666



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    dotsPlease Treat Me Rightdots
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    Oh kiss me baby
    Make me want you
    Even though
    You know I already do

    Tease me darling
    Make me scream
    Act as if
    We are living a dream

    Hold me sweetie
    Make me understand
    Why you canít
    Be my man

    Act like you love me
    Even if you donít have the heart
    Let me know
    So I know where to start

    Iíll be your dream girl
    The one you canít be without
    The way I care
    Youíll have no doubt

    Just please treat me right
    Even if Iím just your whore
    At least pretend
    So I can love you more




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      This is amazing but so sad so sad. My little ballerina with her tutu at her ankles you're such a beautiful disaster.
    | Posted on 2007-01-04 00:00:00 | by Flowerinbloom | [ Reply to This ]


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