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    dots Submission Name: Cocaine in the New Yeardots
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    Author: fabulousAMY
    ASL Info:    21/Female/CA
    Elite Ratio:    2.97 - 159/159/61
    Words: 218
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    dotsCocaine in the New Yeardots
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    A new year, I am better off alone,
    You're talking to me on the phone,
    Everything is "baby, I adore you so."
    Your mouth is full of praise and promise,
    It spills from your lips with sincerity.
    I am better off alone.
    I do not mention lies and hurt,
    I hurt you more than you could hurt me.
    How do you hurt a statue of a girl?
    Brown hair, glitter, high heels.
    Cold hands, cold heart, cold blood.
    I am better off alone.
    Lines of cocaine on your desk,
    Strangers with intentions I cannot be sure of,
    But you never tell me these things.
    I'm a clever girl I can tell on my own.
    White powder in your pockets, in your nose.
    I am better off alone.
    You speak quickly with excitement,
    Nothing but sweet reunions soon.
    When we come back from holiday homes,
    Your pockets full of your dirty money,
    Gorgeous artist's hands full of gifts for me.
    I am better off alone.
    Long fingers griping a white gold ring.
    A white gold ring from white powder.
    The year is over, you're the same.
    Strange and new and holding on too tight.
    If the ring is on my finger, I'm stuck.
    I am better off alone, I am better off alone.
    Afterall, it's a new year.




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      not just emotion, but it's expressed just right in a line segment emotional memoir - it's perfectly started and closed off. i try not to pay too much attention to structure, but i thought it was pretty effective in this. and if you wrote this on coke i would totally, you know, relate to you.
    | Posted on 2007-03-13 00:00:00 | by Myopic | [ Reply to This ]
      I like this,
    It's kind of funny, Unfortunately I look at this from the other side of the coin.
    I made the promises and broke them, I said the "I love yous" when what I really should have been saying is "I love it"
    Your right to turn your back, it's a very poisenous substance, it will poisen the body and the mind, it will go as far as to poisen the soul.
    I have to say that my addiction is now a memory but I have changed so much that I can't even remember what I used to be like.
    Very poinent write,
    Thank you,
    Will
    | Posted on 2007-01-21 00:00:00 | by Twice | [ Reply to This ]
      News years resolutions hmmm...reminiscent of a situation I encountered. Thanks for sharing.

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    | Posted on 2007-01-12 00:00:00 | by fryte | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow. This poem is definitly full of emotion. Sometimes all it takes is realization to change a situation. I really liked it and can't wait to read more of your work.
    ~Fairy~
    | Posted on 2007-01-01 00:00:00 | by TheBlackFairy | [ Reply to This ]
      wow this piece of very strong and full of emotion. The line work was not so flowy, but over all it was a wonderful poem, you can feel the emotion coming off of it.

    great work,
    -AnnMarie
    | Posted on 2007-01-01 00:00:00 | by aNNmARIE | [ Reply to This ]
      I felt this one. I enjoyed it thoroughly. I really did. An endless cycle. One lie after another. And even in the New Year nothing changes. Thank you for writing this. It was beyond wonderful.
    | Posted on 2006-12-31 00:00:00 | by Karios | [ Reply to This ]


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