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Author: Amanda Lynn Elite Ratio:    3.09 - 332 /193 /56 Words: 88

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Here I am alone again Waiting for my life Waiting for a change from within To get me steadily through this strife I f eel the world passing by me Leaving me alone to either fail or fly I feel my wings withering A silent fall from clouds up high I know the angles laugh at me My clumsy attempt at immortality Failing as the world spins by I reach out a hand I scream out a cry What a bloody end For one such as I

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wow. i really enjoyed this poem. simply put: great imagery and great concept. i love this piece. "I feel my wings withering A silent fall from clouds up high I know the angles laugh at me My clumsy attempt at immortality" great work. J. Ackson Jr.

| Posted on 2007-01-22 00:00:00 | by JAcksonJr | [ Reply to This ]

This has partentail ( I know that is way off) but not the point. Here in this peice seems like u held back some of your emtions and didn't let it come out. the flow was alright the spelling error's Like in Ln5 U put a space between the f and the eel for feel and other small things . other than that it was okay. well hope to hear from u max aka lil'Mix

| Posted on 2006-12-31 00:00:00 | by theman | [ Reply to This ]

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