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Author: Amanda Lynn
Elite Ratio:    3.09 - 332 /193 /56
Words: 88
Class/Type: Misc /Misc
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Here I am alone again
Waiting for my life
Waiting for a change from within
To get me steadily through this strife
I f eel the world passing by me
Leaving me alone to either fail or fly
I feel my wings withering
A silent fall from clouds up high
I know the angles laugh at me
My clumsy attempt at immortality
Failing as the world spins by
I reach out a hand
I scream out a cry
What a bloody end
For one such as I

Submitted on 2006-12-31 21:12:47     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  wow. i really enjoyed this poem. simply put: great imagery and great concept. i love this piece.

"I feel my wings withering
A silent fall from clouds up high
I know the angles laugh at me
My clumsy attempt at immortality"

great work.

J. Ackson Jr.
| Posted on 2007-01-22 00:00:00 | by JAcksonJr | [ Reply to This ]
  This has partentail ( I know that is way off) but not the point. Here in this peice seems like u held back some of your emtions and didn't let it come out. the flow was alright the spelling error's Like in Ln5 U put a space between the f and the eel for feel and other small things . other than that it was okay. well hope to hear from u

max aka lil'Mix
| Posted on 2006-12-31 00:00:00 | by theman | [ Reply to This ]

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