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Pressure


Author: DiamondTears
ASL Info:    20/F/Wa
Elite Ratio:    3.3 - 66 /109 /57
Words: 46
Class/Type: Poetry /Misc
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Pressure



There is an imbalance in this life,
My eyes are twitching,
And my problems are dilating.
Metal rock songs are skipping.
Pressure in my ears,
And people keep yelling for something,
Bloody fingernails,
Parental figures,
Shadowed over slain grass,
Blue face,
Leaking out red existence.




Submitted on 2007-01-01 03:13:17     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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