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    dots Submission Name: Miss me.dots
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    Author: kurdy
    ASL Info:    15/female/USA
    Elite Ratio:    1.36 - 13/15/5
    Words: 130
    Class/Type: Poetry/
    Total Views: 125
    Average Vote:    5.0000
    Bytes: 830



    Description:
       I wrote this poem for any girl that had been hurt by a Guy. My best friend had been cheated on after she built her world around a boy she thought she loved.

    You never know what you have untill its gone...


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    dotsMiss me.dots
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    Find a moment spare a word,
    Hold on to the things you've heard,
    Fall into your chambers bed
    Remember all the things I said.

    Contemplate what puzzles you,
    Think of the pain you put me through
    When I awoke not to your smile
    But to the tears I've cryed a while.

    Dream the dreams I am in,
    Spotlight all your hidden sin
    Taste my lips nolonger there
    wish your hands could feel my hair.

    Ache to hold me in your arms
    And for all my lovely charms
    Write about the things your feel,
    My heart, the one thing, you couldn't to steel.

    Now picture Her in my place,
    Feel the shame cover your face,
    Tremble to the fact and see,
    Your biggest mistake was betraying me...




    Submitted on 2007-01-01 16:23:45     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      very cutte. i like the sentament. it was cool, (the lighter stuff's a bit new to me so... bear with me here) it's got a nice rythm and flow.
    | Posted on 2007-01-01 00:00:00 | by in shadow | [ Reply to This ]
      i love the message,i myself love rymeing,but sometimes rymeing isnt always easy,and it seems a little forced in places like were it says wish your hands could feel my hair.

    my favorite parts are-Ache to hold me in your arms
    And for all my lovely charms
    Write about the things your feel,
    My heart, the one thing, you couldn't to steel.

    and

    Tremble to the fact and see,
    Your biggest mistake was betraying me...

    -safire-

    | Posted on 2007-01-01 00:00:00 | by girly101 | [ Reply to This ]



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