Journey Into Life -------------------------------------------
Yesterday is today
So tommorow will never come
When one wants to see into the future
Just take a deep look into the past
Their you will find your destiny
Do not be alarmed by the negative emotions
That will want to control you
For the human mind is wise
It will find the positive to every negative
Be carefull who you desire to call a friend
For some
Will just want to mold you
Into the person they wish they were
The biggest step into independence
Is when one is in control of their own life
For even if you fail
A part of you has become wiser by defeat
Always remember
You only have one life to live
Make the most of it
The choice is all yours
Money cannot buy happiness
Happiness is an emotion
Created by a positive mind
Guiding you forward
In your journey on this great Earth
Hi Ron. Thanks for your comments on my poems. I have read through this one of yours and a few of your others (as well as the ones by your Mom) and they are full of personal insights and wise words. They do not strike me as poems so much though, as affirmations. You might be able to make a pretty penny if you put them all together in a tidy little book and called them something clever. Maybe something like:
Surviving Today: Words to Live By. Or you could write it with your Mom and do some play on words about Mother always knowing best. I don't know. Just my thoughts. :)
This is full of some great lines--words of wisdom, proverbs... something. But they're a little disjointed. Not the thoughts, they flow nicely, but the way you wrote it. I don't know if you meant it that way or not. It works, but it might be easier to read and grasp if there was some punctuation.
... I thought the whole piece would be filled with these catchy, strong lines, (the first 2 or 3 are exceptional), but then you kind of let me down... It's a very positive piece which has made a lot of people happy, so it's filled its duty. I think it could be made stronger if it had a few adjustments. But either way, its your work.
Rachel
What I like about your's and your mom's poems, apart from being warm and relatable, these poems helps to open that little window(of positiveness) in that really dark, hopeless room(of life). These poems are uplifting, inspiring and letting the message out of 'keep walking, never giving up'. It's tough to write such poems, unless you are that kind of person, extremely positive and warm. I like you both for this :)
What I like about this poem is that it makes you start to think. I like the first view lines
"Yesterday is today
So tomorrow will never come.
When one wants to see into the future
Just take a deep look into the past."
Those who deny history are condemned to repeat. This is what we say in our ToK class. The poem really makes me think about life, I really like it.
A great deal of wisdom comes from reflecting on those mistakes we all make. It's an ultimate goal to find the positive side of negatives, to see a way to smile and laugh even during sad times, and to develop the strength of character to reach out and touch others. Thanks for sharing that positive outlook! Sharon
Ron-thanks a bunch for commenting on my piece and giving me a welcome!!!! As for this piece.........it is rather pensive and compelling. You have some good advice in there. For this kind of work........I would change nothing. It encouraged happiness to me and it's very original. Keep it up!! :)
My dear friend,
Sometimes it takes me awhile to comment on anything - I read tons but often just can't find the time I would like or need to truly comment. This one (as all your works) makes me think - makes me reflect and I can ever so relate. Your words always have a way of reflecting so much of what is on my mind sometimes - and you put into words for me - thank you - again.
After looking through some of your work, I saw it was all well-written, but none of it really connected with me and made me think, but this one was different entirely.
"Be carefull who you desire to call a friend
For some
Will just want to mold you"
That one hit the nail on the head for me. Overall a good write and I can't think of any possible improvements.
I like this a lot...sure know how it feels negative to look back on the past. My problem is, getting over the past. I really related to this one. Thanks for sharing.
Hey Ron,
Sorry I dissappeared, been a wierd month,
first of all thank you for the comments on "If I could wear your skin" yea, I guess you could say I was a little angry, but I'm all better.
Now for this wonderful poem, I have to tell you, you should be a motivational speaker. You have a very rare ability to twist the negative into positive. I love this line:
"For even if you fail
A part of you has become wiser by defeat"
How true is that!
I think that anyone who is struggling in life should take 5 minutes and read your poetry.
I think that the thing I liked best about this poem is it's about inner strength, I understand that you are a very religious person but you had the piece of mind to keep God out of the poem. You will reach alot of people with this subject.
Nice write,
Thanks,
Will
Ron, this is another wonderful positive poem! I think it will be inspirational and helpful to all who read it. There was a time in my life when I believe the late Dr. Norman Vincent Peale's book "The Power of Positive Thinking" saved my life, and I am uplifted by your inspirational poem!
"Yesterday is today So tommorow will never come When one wants to see into the future Just take a deep look into the past Their you will find your destiny"
this is a familiar stanza, but i dont know from where. similar topic, probably.
well this is an interesting write, i think it is very well said and great advice for anyone, is to live their lives to their own standards lol something im working on lol great job buddy take care....Joy
Submission Name: Journey Into Life
