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Submission Name: Addiction dots

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Author:	Lil gal
ASL Info:	28/F-ya/here
Elite Ratio:	3.19 - 354/210/34
Words:	116

Class/Type:	Poetry/Misc
Total Views:	159
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Description:
I quit smoking and it's all I can think about.

Addiction dots

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I want you more than anything,
I need you in my life.

Feel you deep inside me,
relieving my pain and strife.

I have to have you.....so desperately.

Fill my body with your poison,
a slave to it is what I'm meant to be...

You're a perfect drug....
when coarsing through my veins.

ENOUGH!!

No more will you possess me,
I have the antidote to ur poison.

Power over me,
no longer.

I've found something,
which I'm so much fonder.

Breathing....
Living....

Committing suicide slowly,
I don't think so...

Good bye, Nicotine
You were nothing but a very bad dream.

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  liked this piece solely on the the merit that it sounded like an adiction to something else"H" and at the very end of the poem you are surprised its "nicotine"the journey of affliction............................................................................................................................ocean sand
| Posted on 2007-06-07 00:00:00 | by temporal nights | [ Reply to This ]
  I really needed to see this today - I'm trying to cut back.....again......tis so funny when we can be so strong in someways but in some vices we just allow ourselves to be overcome. THing is I like smoking! I just thank the Lord for taking my craving and know that "IT's" done

Excellent piece that could be on one of those anti-smoking campaigns =0

love,peace,joy&smiles to share
tif
| Posted on 2007-03-22 00:00:00 | by Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]
  oooo i love smoking. nice how you wrote to get it off your brain. very nice.
are you still quit??
hope so
good luck
| Posted on 2007-03-20 00:00:00 | by HappyBuddaH | [ Reply to This ]
  That is a very great write you could use it for other addictions as well like for my case, I smoke now but I used to be addicted to coke but after 1 year in rehab I can finally say I'll never touch it again. Anyways let me stop before I start telling you my whole life story lol. Very Good write and great emotion,
-Jenny
| Posted on 2007-01-29 00:00:00 | by Darklonelygirl | [ Reply to This ]
  good write, my grandmother should read this. its great that you quit, more people should have your willpower. =] im happy for you.
just thought i would let you know, the way that the word 'coarsing' is being used, it should be 'coursing'. just a suggestion. by the way, thanks for the comment on Pill. ^_^
- Michi
| Posted on 2007-01-16 00:00:00 | by _Phoenix | [ Reply to This ]
  have you seen that new commercial where the brain receptors are tweaking out with madness without nicotine? thats what your poem reminded me of. It is hard as [censored]. I STILL crave them. winning the battle, good job lil warrior.
| Posted on 2007-01-16 00:00:00 | by laniejane | [ Reply to This ]
  It's really good. I like how you start with your passion and then suddenly fight it and quit. brilliant!
| Posted on 2007-01-03 00:00:00 | by VampireMaiden | [ Reply to This ]
  excellent write~congrats on quitting~keep it up!! :)
| Posted on 2007-01-03 00:00:00 | by DesecratedDream | [ Reply to This ]
  good for you! i hope it goes well. im a smoker, and i know how hard it is to quit. its willpower you need, and lots of it.
i wish you luck!
michelle

ps. read my poem, 'black cloud'. you might find it interesting.
| Posted on 2007-01-02 00:00:00 | by whirl | [ Reply to This ]

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