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Looking in Heart

Author: darkwiccan14
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Words: 78
Class/Type: Random Thoughts /Love
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Looking in Heart

Looking in those eyes,
So deep and blue,
Wondering why me,
and you.

Looking into that sorrowful face,
Wanting to just embrace,
Putting your fingers to my lips,
to trace.

Looking for a place,
In your heart for a case,
Which to me,
is a maze,
by the way.

After searching for that place,
To go to escape,
from this dark, crowded world,
Is that one place that I will,

Submitted on 2007-01-02 20:25:16     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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