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    dots Submission Name: This Poem Is Now Historydots
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    Author: Katana Ryoko
    ASL Info:    17/F/Cali
    Elite Ratio:    2.86 - 483/428/109
    Words: 24
    Class/Type: Poetry/Nature
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    dotsThis Poem Is Now Historydots
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    Last year
    Yesterday
    The past
    Now history

    This second
    The present
    Wednesday
    The year 2006

    Next year
    Tomorrow
    The future
    Never known




    Submitted on 2007-01-02 21:09:56     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      I think I can almost understand what you're trying to say, but the sentences are too fragmented...I'm having the same problem today; haven't had a new idea in weeks.

    (Note that I'm actually reading other people's stuff this morning: we had a sub in English today and I got a pass to the library for the rest of the period.)

    So...bloody...tired...
    ...zzzz....zz...

    --crimson echo
    | Posted on 2007-02-15 00:00:00 | by crimson echo | [ Reply to This ]
      I thought this poem was a little confusing... i don't think there are enough words to get your point across... i kind of understand what you're trying to say, but you might want to add in some more words... just a thought. keep writing!

    STAY STRONG
    | Posted on 2007-01-17 00:00:00 | by SOS33 | [ Reply to This ]
      I think this was a pretty simple concept that doesn't work well as a short write. It's very vague yet easily understood, thus making it just common seeming. Expand a bit i think, since the base of your idea is very nice.
    | Posted on 2007-01-02 00:00:00 | by Ygi | [ Reply to This ]


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