This Poem Is Now History

Author: Katana Ryoko ASL Info:    17/F/Cali Elite Ratio:    2.86 - 483 /428 /109 Words: 24

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This Poem Is Now History

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Last year Yesterday The past Now history This second The present Wednesday The year 2006 Next year Tomorrow The future Never known

Submitted on 2007-01-02 21:09:56     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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I think I can almost understand what you're trying to say, but the sentences are too fragmented...I'm having the same problem today; haven't had a new idea in weeks. (Note that I'm actually reading other people's stuff this morning: we had a sub in English today and I got a pass to the library for the rest of the period.) So...bloody...tired... ...zzzz....zz... --crimson echo

| Posted on 2007-02-15 00:00:00 | by crimson echo | [ Reply to This ]

I thought this poem was a little confusing... i don't think there are enough words to get your point across... i kind of understand what you're trying to say, but you might want to add in some more words... just a thought. keep writing! STAY STRONG

| Posted on 2007-01-17 00:00:00 | by SOS33 | [ Reply to This ]

I think this was a pretty simple concept that doesn't work well as a short write. It's very vague yet easily understood, thus making it just common seeming. Expand a bit i think, since the base of your idea is very nice.

| Posted on 2007-01-02 00:00:00 | by Ygi | [ Reply to This ]

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