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    dots Submission Name: from a vampire's point of veiwdots

    Author: fireflye
    ASL Info:    15/f/cananda/toronto
    Elite Ratio:    2.16 - 11/28/20
    Words: 309
    Class/Type: Poetry/Vampire
    Total Views: 849
    Average Vote:    5.0000
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       my second vampire poem!!!

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    dotsfrom a vampire's point of veiwdots

    Catch my falling tears, and let them stain
    Don’t shun away your hand in disdain
    They burn, I know, but so does love
    You still hold on to it, embrace this touch

    Drops of crimson that cause little craters on your skin
    To you, is crying blood considered a sin?
    I am what I am, I am what I want to be
    Do you even know how to live your life righteously?

    I cannot say I know everything, for I am young compared to many
    But I do know more than you will ever feel…
    Immortal I am, though as lonely as can be
    Damnation has caused my heart to look for my own humanity

    You should learn to live, but you will never realize
    The meaning of life in an immortal’s eyes
    For we understand the hopes, the fears, the truth
    But...we can never live it again, like you seem to…

    We can never enjoy the feeling of knowing there will be an end
    We watch the hundreds of deaths of our mortal friends
    When the sun comes up, we hurriedly cower
    We lose what we first believed was to always be ours…

    You should never fear us, for we are weaker than you
    Never in real life, did we try to find the truth
    Thinking immortality would be our salvation in Hell
    We never had a chance to discover our true human selves…

    What are we doing “alive”, for our dead life can be wasted…
    We kill brazenly until our thrist is temporarily sated
    We are pariahs…we have brought this upon ourselves…
    Why did we think life was hard, when immortality is Hell?

    Submitted on 2007-01-02 22:38:00     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Some of my favorite vampire characters are the ones that do have feelings, so I have to disagree with the last comment. I think that you have captured the angst and yearning that such a one would feel very well. I especially love the last stanza...it is amazing. Great job!
    | Posted on 2007-01-15 00:00:00 | by jennah | [ Reply to This ]
      I thought it was good and cool, however being a vampire fan, I have to be annoying and point this out.

    Vampires don't usually have feelings :-p. Vampires tend to of lost all their feeling from an endless life of seeing people die, losing loved ones ect. As a result, many vampires find beauty in other people, because they show emotions the vampire has grown cold to.
    | Posted on 2007-01-02 00:00:00 | by Ygi | [ Reply to This ]
      I love this! It's not the typical vampire poem, and, I think, it's got a part of you in it. But it's awesome! There are a few parts that are a little shaky, so watch out on breaking form, but other than that! I love this!
    | Posted on 2007-01-02 00:00:00 | by Persephone | [ Reply to This ]

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