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    dots Submission Name: the sacred throat and the cranedots
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    Author: blackbird
    ASL Info:    31/male/reykjavik iceland
    Elite Ratio:    2.35 - 194/328/300
    Words: 222
    Class/Type: Prose/Misc
    Total Views: 487
    Average Vote:    4.0000
    Bytes: 1475



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    dotsthe sacred throat and the cranedots
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    cooly wick away the day
    and rip a storm of lapping for the bruised
    we, traders of the floating speech
    whisper a honeyed voice instead

    i'm lost in the ABC's
    blood butterflies cringing swell
    ice maidens of my children
    reap the guilty picnic

    i am the hidden spirits breath
    a passion of apples
    blood unbuttoned around the ring
    i'm still merely chasing orphaned paint

    i grieve the guilty dirt
    once more i admire the fraile
    when they break
    they gaze so beautifully

    when i awake
    eyes scatter like the air apart
    neatly inside the once red pursing
    like some strange fruit has died...
    or a book turned inward

    i only labor for the unheard
    it seeps like tiny stars inside me
    like thunder does the spacing
    beat after beat a memory we lost

    i crave the wilting pebbles i have shaped
    born fists like raging ravens
    so deep the feeling of winter leaving morning
    only a crater mourns the crane

    i am a mere thimble within these
    kissing bright lips above
    like jewels or foolish spices
    i only drink the best

    pour me a mirror and i will melt in you
    like a soft gathering of fingers
    the chords are at their strangest
    as they leave your sacred throat





    Submitted on 2007-01-03 00:00:54     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      like rain... you..wow im at a loss for words
    | Posted on 2007-03-22 00:00:00 | by in shadow | [ Reply to This ]
      O.o you should seriously consider motivating other people. I feel so inspired now!
    Whee a favourite from you finally= )
    Cheers, keep up the good work!
    Azuire
    | Posted on 2007-01-12 00:00:00 | by Azuire | [ Reply to This ]
      Macabre interspersed with beauty!

    I like such themes.

    Adding it to my favs.

    Thanks for sharing.

    Parul.
    | Posted on 2007-01-03 00:00:00 | by Parul garg | [ Reply to This ]


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