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Submission Name: 'say' what thee will dots

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Author:	dismentled
ASL Info:	24/M/"South of Heaven"
Elite Ratio:	4.13 - 617/549/200
Words:	94

Class/Type:	Poetry/Society
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'say' what thee will dots

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hate the world at hand
but why?
now is really not
the time!

when misery and happiness
in fusion doth do comprise,
such massochistic tendencies
amongst other fabled lies;

innocence,such an endless search
of which nothing shall be unearthed!

whispers of happiness
amonst rumnors of dreams
tragedy of it all
is it's just as it seems...

narcassistic apathy
indifferent emotion
filled to the brim
a silent comotion

but, lest we just
fall from it all
another darkly day
the meaning fading
from these words
leaving nothing to "say"

Submitted on 2007-01-03 11:58:46 Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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cool old style yo. I luved the words to this one.
| Posted on 2007-01-10 00:00:00 | by WD-40 | [ Reply to This ]
god you're so....depressive, had i not had a [censored]ty day anyway this might have upset me. You speak truth that i've heard before Bry, losing your touch? :P nah, i'm j/p this wasn't bad...though i'm not a huge fan of your format today, sometimes it doesn't bother me but my mind was stuttering 0_o. First off, feeling apathetic really isn't as horrible as feeling overly empathetic...or not to the person themself because if they *were* apathetic, it wouldn't bother them, right? but if you were regarding the mindset of one person or group of people, they aren't very consistant in their insanity. Apathy is regarded as an uncaring indiference, there's no room for hate in that. Being bitter isn't very fun though, like we really need a reason to hate the world? i have a handful of my own..that bare some relevance to some, and none to others, all that says is i'm living my own life. what's so horrible about two opposites compromising? in learning to appreciate the opposite trait, they're reaching a balance that was far greater than either was standing on it's own.
*innocence and ignorance, it all goes hand in hand.*
--> basically i stopped searching for that kind of innocence, it's not like i'm going to obtain something like that when i basically never had it to begin with.
you are sincerely depressing, *just contemplates the second half of your write...* nice write, very emotional for someone whos' so used to 'the way things are'. it's your life though so i'll stop criticizing...and leave, i hate today- this was good but i've read a lot better from you.
| Posted on 2007-01-03 00:00:00 | by silent_death12 | [ Reply to This ]

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