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    dots Submission Name: Dragon Flydots

    Author: Soulraven
    ASL Info:    31/Male/Illinois
    Elite Ratio:    4.05 - 510/481/142
    Words: 59
    Class/Type: Poetry/Passion
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       To a new friend of mine i just gained from this website (You know who you are) lol (revised) Sorry i meant to split them was an accident lol tried to post before i had to go to work lol my bad

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    dotsDragon Flydots

    Dragon Fly flashing in the night,
    Seen to much to continue the fight.
    Hatred consumed the planet
    And you can not stand it.
    Keep your wings rested for a better day.
    Are the only words you hear me say.
    You can not change the world from sea to sea,
    But believe me Dragon fly you’ve changed me.

    Submitted on 2004-01-30 15:18:37     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      a poem to a friend , It was very personal but I liked it , Wizard
    | Posted on 2004-02-02 00:00:00 | by wizard | [ Reply to This ]
      that was good, KISS, keep it simple silly, you stuck to that ove
    | Posted on 2004-01-30 00:00:00 | by ove | [ Reply to This ]
      Now thatis beautiful. I agree with worth, break that line 3 and you are good to go. Great job.
    | Posted on 2004-01-30 00:00:00 | by Scribner | [ Reply to This ]
      Interesting analogy, because dragonflies are a symbol for change..change for the better, in both the elemental and psychological spheres.Your dragonfly didn't actually change you, but it's presence in you life subtley urges you to review your habits and change those that need changing.Anyway, I agree with Worth, a great compliment to your new friend, even though it could use some spit 'n polish. Nice.
    | Posted on 2004-01-30 00:00:00 | by Silverdog | [ Reply to This ]

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