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    dots Submission Name: Drunken Words... Sober Thoughtsdots
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    Author: precious_poetry
    ASL Info:    19 F TN
    Elite Ratio:    3.17 - 137/145/67
    Words: 133
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
    Total Views: 631
    Average Vote:    5.0000
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       I've been in a slump... Drinking away the past week. I'm over it now, but my reason for losing control is because of myself... Let me know what you think


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    dotsDrunken Words... Sober Thoughtsdots
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    Swaying back and forth,
    From one wall to another,
    Trying to find the bed,
    To crawl up in the cover.

    One drink, two drinks, three,
    The pain slowly faded.
    I saw the bottom of the bottle,
    Opened another as depression invaded.

    I lost my will to move on,
    Thought I'd drink away my sorrow,
    Just to wake to the aching,
    Just to feel the same way tomorrow.

    I ruined what could have been,
    I thought I'd made the right decision.
    I was wrong, now my heart is broken,
    Lacerated, bleeding, all self inflicted.

    Playing, making believe,
    Everyday I wear this mask.
    I drink it up to forget,
    I despise an empty flask.

    My eyelids are heavy,
    Thoughts misconstrued.
    I'll sleep in torment now,
    Lying alone, dreaming of you.




    Submitted on 2007-01-03 16:30:27     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      The imagery was great.
    The emotions are so real that it hurts!
    I can relate to this poem entirely.
    It's ironic how someone thinks that
    a substance can take the pain away
    when in the end, you feel it anyway.
    Reminds me of that song, "Whiskey Lullaby"

    Great piece, keep it up :)

    Ciao,

    }i{Renae}i{
    | Posted on 2007-03-31 00:00:00 | by Poetic_tragedy6 | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow! You always seem so open and real.. when i read your words it sounds like something I could be thinking... The past is always looming with what could have been and the future is always there with what we do not have....I hope your tommorow is better.
    | Posted on 2007-01-03 00:00:00 | by isis_lenore | [ Reply to This ]
      i liked it, nice poem, the rhyming is really good, i noticed one mistake but i,ll put that down to side affects from boozing. it looks like your new year got off to a bad start, but you have put a lot of feeling into this poem, drowning your sorrows,wearing a mask, as you have realised drinking isn,t the answer. put your feelings to paper, maybe that will help. good luck
    gerry
    | Posted on 2007-01-03 00:00:00 | by bogeyman | [ Reply to This ]


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