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    dots Submission Name: Drunken Words... Sober Thoughtsdots

    Author: precious_poetry
    ASL Info:    19 F TN
    Elite Ratio:    3.17 - 137/145/67
    Words: 133
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
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    Average Vote:    5.0000
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       I've been in a slump... Drinking away the past week. I'm over it now, but my reason for losing control is because of myself... Let me know what you think

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    dotsDrunken Words... Sober Thoughtsdots

    Swaying back and forth,
    From one wall to another,
    Trying to find the bed,
    To crawl up in the cover.

    One drink, two drinks, three,
    The pain slowly faded.
    I saw the bottom of the bottle,
    Opened another as depression invaded.

    I lost my will to move on,
    Thought I'd drink away my sorrow,
    Just to wake to the aching,
    Just to feel the same way tomorrow.

    I ruined what could have been,
    I thought I'd made the right decision.
    I was wrong, now my heart is broken,
    Lacerated, bleeding, all self inflicted.

    Playing, making believe,
    Everyday I wear this mask.
    I drink it up to forget,
    I despise an empty flask.

    My eyelids are heavy,
    Thoughts misconstrued.
    I'll sleep in torment now,
    Lying alone, dreaming of you.

    Submitted on 2007-01-03 16:30:27     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      The imagery was great.
    The emotions are so real that it hurts!
    I can relate to this poem entirely.
    It's ironic how someone thinks that
    a substance can take the pain away
    when in the end, you feel it anyway.
    Reminds me of that song, "Whiskey Lullaby"

    Great piece, keep it up :)


    | Posted on 2007-03-31 00:00:00 | by Poetic_tragedy6 | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow! You always seem so open and real.. when i read your words it sounds like something I could be thinking... The past is always looming with what could have been and the future is always there with what we do not have....I hope your tommorow is better.
    | Posted on 2007-01-03 00:00:00 | by isis_lenore | [ Reply to This ]
      i liked it, nice poem, the rhyming is really good, i noticed one mistake but i,ll put that down to side affects from boozing. it looks like your new year got off to a bad start, but you have put a lot of feeling into this poem, drowning your sorrows,wearing a mask, as you have realised drinking isn,t the answer. put your feelings to paper, maybe that will help. good luck
    | Posted on 2007-01-03 00:00:00 | by bogeyman | [ Reply to This ]

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