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    dots Submission Name: Love's Gracedots
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    Author: precious_poetry
    ASL Info:    19 F TN
    Elite Ratio:    3.17 - 137/145/67
    Words: 154
    Class/Type: Poetry/Broken
    Total Views: 590
    Average Vote:    4.0000
    Bytes: 995



    Description:
       Loving... Losing.. You get it.


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    dotsLove's Gracedots
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    A genuine smile takes the place,
    Of the frown stapled to my face.
    I have been blessed by love's grace,
    To be held by him, a loving embrace.

    No longer do those woeful tears fall,
    Only pleasant dreams do I recall,
    Discovered something beautiful all in all,
    I now walk through life completely enthralled.

    Visions of the future sedate my fear,
    The lightest of kisses dry up these tears,

    But life drags on without you here,
    I feel so lonely, as the ink begins to smear.

    I will wake in the morning, all alone,
    And I will weep to remember you're gone,
    I lost something so beautiful, fell off my throne,
    And life will never seem to carry on.

    Woeful tears fall, my thoughts - they race,
    As the frown is again stapled upon this face,
    I have fallen from love's beautiful grace,
    I lie here alone, weeping... unembraced.




    Submitted on 2007-01-03 16:35:59     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      The emotion that you have expressed here is so intense . And I was enwrapped in the feeling that you conveyed so very well. I have been at this place that you wrote of at times I feel like I am still there. Great job and well written.
    Heather
    | Posted on 2007-01-03 00:00:00 | by trynfinity | [ Reply to This ]
      This was really good, the flow of the piece was there from start to end. using the metaphors you did really made this peice happened. other than i can't say nothing wrong wit this piece. keep up the good work.

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    Lil' Mix
    | Posted on 2007-01-03 00:00:00 | by theman | [ Reply to This ]


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