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    dots Submission Name: beautifuldots
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    Author: isuperhero
    ASL Info:    14, female, WA
    Elite Ratio:    2.31 - 13/15/16
    Words: 178
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Being a Teen
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    dotsbeautifuldots
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    In a crowd,
    the noise is loud,
    and I can still hear my heart beating.

    Maybe because,
    My soul is cut,
    and my heart is bleeding.

    All I want,
    is to be loved.
    All I want,
    is for someone,
    to say I'm beautiful.

    Maybe its time,
    that my life,
    is improved,
    I mean it is my own choice, isnt it?

    But its not that easy,
    Dont you see,
    that I'm not that kind of person.

    I cant just make my life better.
    All I want is to break these fetters.
    I just want to get free of my past and my mistakes.

    All I want,
    is to be loved,
    all I want is for someone,
    to say that I'm beautiful.

    I dont want people to base my beauty off of how I dress or talk.
    I just want to be accepted,
    and for people to think of me as exceptional.

    All I want,
    is to be loved,
    all I want is for someone,
    to say that I'm beautiful.




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      i like it. i like the idea of this. its really true. nice job. keep it up.
    | Posted on 2007-06-11 00:00:00 | by save me | [ Reply to This ]
      yep. high hopes.

    good write.
    | Posted on 2007-01-10 00:00:00 | by itsjustme22 | [ Reply to This ]
      i like the plot of tihs write.

    I have written some stuff like this, and i agree that it would take a miracle to have the world become a place where inner beauty is judged, and not the outer shell.

    good write
    | Posted on 2007-01-04 00:00:00 | by itsjustme22 | [ Reply to This ]
      wouldnt the world be such an oh so nice place if nobody based their opinions on looks and the way you dress and pass their judgement so quickly when they themselves are the trifling ones? I agree hun Keep up the good work and good luck in everything...and oh yeah..welcome to Elite! :)
    | Posted on 2007-01-03 00:00:00 | by DesecratedDream | [ Reply to This ]


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