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    dots Submission Name: hush the moments lucid dovesdots
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    Author: blackbird
    ASL Info:    31/male/reykjavik iceland
    Elite Ratio:    2.35 - 194/328/300
    Words: 219
    Class/Type: Prose/Misc
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    dotshush the moments lucid dovesdots
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    at night i dish around the cities bored
    thick colours breathe on me like flowers do
    while lucid doves pick the passers teeth
    the dust of ancient lovers crowd the street

    i am born here like the walls themselves
    often keeping out the rain
    my own ceiling is the fire of memory

    i daze amongst the whistling rosehips
    a child within the fog
    i have no past in these guilty seconds
    like the forgotten ocean forest

    a bloodless stone one palms for comfort
    often i am the death of vast crowds inside me
    i plant skin for the passing time
    and wrap my feet like gentle boats

    i give no prayers, only receive them
    my mouth tastes hopeless
    it's the playground of tolerant idols
    a place to rest your eyes before you go

    i give to you a secret thought
    that the sky is no more itself than us
    so that only in travelled sleep
    can you hear the fluid words within

    the humming of the lawns around me
    and the moonlit birds i gaze into
    are passing spirits in my life
    their colour only flaunts a fury

    i shall wheel to you
    and these haunts i give away
    i am the moon only hanging
    a hushed moment before we met




    Submitted on 2007-01-03 18:46:02     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      not since shakespear have i heard such beauty flow from the written page..

    you are an artist


    ever in awe
    ~shadow
    | Posted on 2007-03-22 00:00:00 | by in shadow | [ Reply to This ]
      sheer brilliance.
    i often read poetry or prose and say to myself, well, i'd have done this, or put that line there...you know what i mean?
    but not here...i wouldn't change a thing...stunning.
    michelle
    | Posted on 2007-01-22 00:00:00 | by whirl | [ Reply to This ]
      I think I have to agree with both Andz and DontLetGo421. The words you painted was very clear...it seems you were reflecting upon a love or something....

    I sure hope that you tell us in your descriptions were you got the inspiration from because some of us lowly peps need to know where the inspiration goes after is abandons us!
    | Posted on 2007-01-04 00:00:00 | by Twisted | [ Reply to This ]
      I'm just wondering, can you paint? I do hope you can. would you paint that, paint it and then share with us a vision of words in color?
    I can almost see it.
    | Posted on 2007-01-03 00:00:00 | by Andz | [ Reply to This ]
      wow this is amazing.i loved every second of it.
    | Posted on 2007-01-03 00:00:00 | by DontLetGo421 | [ Reply to This ]


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