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    dots Submission Name: Yet another hospital tripdots

    Author: rocker5871
    Elite Ratio:    1.37 - 191/147/90
    Words: 90
    Class/Type: Misc/Serious
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       i wrote this poem over the summer when my dad was in the hospital adn i honestly thought he was dying but god showed a little mercy for me

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    dotsYet another hospital tripdots

    Being here is
    Like being in hell.
    Dadís having hallucinations and mixing reality.
    Iím scared,
    Really scared.
    I donít even know
    How long Iíll have a father.
    Heís thinking heís in other places,
    Like Columbia or
    Harrisonville during the shooting.
    People stare when I cry,
    But how can I not?
    Mom says she knows how I feel,
    But nobody does.
    Nobody else can have
    The steady relationship
    I have with death and pain.
    I donítí even think
    That dadís coming home.

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      This is a very good poem, and I don't mean to sound corny or weird or anything, but people *do* know. There are people going through some of the same things. Okay, maybe not the *exact* same things, but they can understand sort of what you're going through.

    It reminds me of when my mom was on morphine. You know?

    Oh jeez, I've been going on for far too long, all I meant to say was that it's a great poem, keep up the good work.
    | Posted on 2007-01-07 00:00:00 | by xcut_up_angelx | [ Reply to This ]
      im sorry that you ever had to feel this,

    i recently went through something like this- except the dellusional behavior hasn't stopped yet.

    good write, and keep up the good work.
    | Posted on 2007-01-04 00:00:00 | by itsjustme22 | [ Reply to This ]

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