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    dots Submission Name: Hospitaldots
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    Author: rocker5871
    Elite Ratio:    1.37 - 191/147/90
    Words: 61
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    Description:
       2nd poem i wrote while dad was in the hospital for the second time


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    dotsHospitaldots
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    I see the people
    So sad and miserable
    I know they’re sick
    And losing hope
    I sit and wonder
    IF dad will make it home
    And how many hearts willstop
    While I sit in his hospital room
    Listening the to the low him of the machines
    And the bleep of the heart monitor
    Hoping the line doesn’t go
    Flat.




    Submitted on 2007-01-03 22:01:30     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      That's really sad. I hope he feels better.
    | Posted on 2007-01-04 00:00:00 | by Gothic Misery | [ Reply to This ]


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