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Submission Name: Hospital dots

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Author:	rocker5871
Elite Ratio:	1.37 - 191/147/90
Words:	61

Class/Type:	Poetry/Misc
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2nd poem i wrote while dad was in the hospital for the second time

Hospital dots

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I see the people
So sad and miserable
I know they’re sick
And losing hope
I sit and wonder
IF dad will make it home
And how many hearts willstop
While I sit in his hospital room
Listening the to the low him of the machines
And the bleep of the heart monitor
Hoping the line doesn’t go
Flat.

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That's really sad. I hope he feels better.
| Posted on 2007-01-04 00:00:00 | by Gothic Misery | [ Reply to This ]

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