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    dots Submission Name: Making Updots
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    Author: mdsouza
    Elite Ratio:    4.57 - 161/110/25
    Words: 96
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
    Total Views: 784
    Average Vote:    4.0000
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       Let's have a friendly talk


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    dotsMaking Updots
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    Let's be good friends today,
    Let it be worthwhile a walk;
    Forgetting what we've done yesterday,
    Let's have a friendly talk.

    Tomorrow, one of us could die-
    Or both of us together.
    So, let's make up, you & I,
    Yes, let's make hay in fair weather.

    We have had things against each other,
    Brothers though, we are.
    But now, lets forgive each other -
    For no one should stray too far.

    We won't fight again, my brother,
    We'll make up, for we should.
    We will stay together forever,
    Together - for good.




    Submitted on 2007-01-04 00:29:49     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I enjoyed this because rebuilding bonds in something that we need in today's world. so many ppl have forgotten how it is to forgive and they should look to this poem for advice because this is showing you how to forgive and forget in pure simplicity
    | Posted on 2010-02-11 00:00:00 | by poet09 | [ Reply to This ]
      The sentiments expressed (forgiveness, getting along, etc.) are ones too few people appreciate enough. Time has a way of slipping by and often people forget exactly what caused bad feelings in the first place. Your message was great. :-) Sharon
    | Posted on 2007-07-25 00:00:00 | by Peggy Paris | [ Reply to This ]
      I enjoyed this poem. You did a good job at rhyming and not taking away from the meaning. There were a couple parts where I stumbled on the words because of the order ("Brothers though, we are.") Other than that, I understood this poem and think you did a wonderful job.
    | Posted on 2007-02-19 00:00:00 | by DontxSurrender | [ Reply to This ]


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