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    dots Submission Name: Little Childrendots
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    Author: mdsouza
    Elite Ratio:    4.57 - 161/110/25
    Words: 110
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    Description:
       within life's smallest things, strive to do your best


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    dotsLittle Childrendots
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    Little children growing up,
    Blooming day by day,
    Blossom with goodness and love
    At home, work and play.

    Shine and try your very best
    And work hard to be pure,
    Pray fervently, children, lest,
    Your life be a failure.

    Show that God lives within you,
    Be good to everyone.
    Be humble and obedient
    And you'll shine brighter than the sun.

    You've to save a person's life
    From evil deeds, some day.
    You've to bring happiness
    To all who come your way.

    Therefore, within life's smallest things,
    Strive to do your best.
    So that, when you end your course of life,
    In God's arms you'll rest.




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      Lovely a true way to live life while growing up from child to adult ...
    I only have one thing here i would change if it were mine

    You've to save a person's life
    From evil deeds, some day.
    You've to bring happiness
    To all who come by your way.

    I would take out by so it reads like this

    You've to save a person's life
    From evil deeds, some day.
    You've to bring happiness
    To all who come your way.


    Other than that one word this is a true testment of being a good person as a child growing up good thoughts you have here ...
    | Posted on 2007-06-15 00:00:00 | by deluka | [ Reply to This ]


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