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    dots Submission Name: Here's to 'The Couple'dots
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    Author: mdsouza
    Elite Ratio:    4.57 - 161/110/25
    Words: 135
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    Average Vote:    5.0000
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       this 'couple' - my parents


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    dotsHere's to 'The Couple'dots
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    Here's to the couple
    So gorgeous, so rare.
    Two angels from Heaven
    Under God's loving care.

    The joy of togetherness,
    They nurture, they share.
    No distance can tarnish
    The love that they bear.

    The lives that they lead,
    The pains that they take.
    What love it must need,
    For this family, to make!

    How fortunate that I can share
    Such a wonderful bond
    With this 'couple' - my parents
    Of whom I'm so fond.

    Therefore I shall praise and glorify
    God, for his mercy and blessings divine.
    "Lord, how little and unworthy am I
    Of parents as lovely as mine!"

    "Thankyou, Lord, for this wonderful creation
    - Matrimony of man and wife.
    For today, I can look upto them in admiration
    - Treasures of my life!"




    Submitted on 2007-01-04 00:39:29     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Oh my goodness Megan,I'm not one to just say nothing but praise but i'm breaking that saying now...

    There's nothing at all out of place that needs to be changed it's just lovely....
    What a beautiful poem written about your parents...
    Every line holds a meaning which flows right off the page...
    Nothing seems forced and the image you have painted for us the readers is clear....

    If only all kids could be blessed to have parents like yours well done Megan .....

    I rate this poem a 5 in the WOW zone!
    and i'm taking it to my home page...This piece deserves to be read by more readers...
    | Posted on 2007-07-24 00:00:00 | by deluka | [ Reply to This ]
      This is lovely, Megan! It has great rhyme and meter, and tells a beautiful story! Nice work, and I know your parents were thrilled with it!
    | Posted on 2007-02-08 00:00:00 | by Ron Cole | [ Reply to This ]
      well, kiddo, im glad that you love your parents and that they love you. you're right to treasure it. i liked the whole poe, too. the rhyme wasnt forced like it can be sometimes. the rhythm stayed consistant. all in all, a good write. i hope your family bond continues forever. kudos, kiddo.

    i tip my hat and bid thee farewell.
    | Posted on 2007-01-05 00:00:00 | by PoeticNonsense | [ Reply to This ]


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