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    dots Submission Name: Fasten Your Seatbelts Kiddies!dots
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    Author: Glassy Eyed
    ASL Info:    17/f
    Elite Ratio:    3.8 - 550/427/187
    Words: 109
    Class/Type: Poetry/Political
    Total Views: 219
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    dotsFasten Your Seatbelts Kiddies!dots
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    Fasten your seatbelts kiddies,
    You're in for the ride of your life.
    Follow the piper now,
    And listen to his fife.

    "The optimistic will not survive,"
    The cynics cry out in hate,
    "The predominate pessimists,
    Will accumulate!"

    Their savage system of supply and demand,
    Will only feed their greed,
    As with generation after generation,
    They slowly plant the seed...

    To buy, to buy,
    To spend and spend
    These are
    The latest trends.

    Don't fall behind,
    We're leaving now,
    Don't ask why,
    Don't ask how,

    Just be what they fear,
    And give them a scare,
    They'll look to the heaven's,
    And send up a prayer.




    Submitted on 2007-01-04 12:08:13     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      hi lia, welcome back and happy new year.well i read over the original poem, and i see you have changed the 5th stanza and left out the 7th. i remmember nit picking about a line in the 5th stanza( it was only my opinion).now i have read the new version a couple of times, i think it reads a lot better, it flows smoothly from start to finish.the ommiting of the 7th stanza makes the new version less angrier, but it still states it,s point very clearly. i would say the poem , like a good wine has matured.it,s still a great poem in my opinion.
    gerry
    | Posted on 2007-01-04 00:00:00 | by bogeyman | [ Reply to This ]



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