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    dots Submission Name: Just like youdots
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    Author: atonement
    Elite Ratio:    2.71 - 106/186/98
    Words: 113
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    Average Vote:    1.0000
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       I was pissed at my mom and my family


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    dotsJust like youdots
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    so fuck this,
    Im a big bitch,
    and you're a fucking whore,
    don't you just love our family pet names?

    You don't fucking get this,
    do you?
    Are you a fucking retard?
    Guess I am, and the fucking
    villiage idiot too.

    And you say Im the one
    that brought this family down
    from grace, and you fucked
    us all up too.

    Look at us,
    on any god given day,
    there's nothing left,
    but repeated piano tunes,
    hockey victories
    and pitty sunday fights.

    But hey,
    you can say it too,
    fuck it, and there's
    no use,
    all that remains are
    these screaming memories.




    Submitted on 2007-01-04 12:45:28     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I can see were you coming from with your anger, but I suggest you use another word than [censored]. You can for sure see the anger, but the way that it is worded well, defeats the purpose to me.

    ~Meagan
    | Posted on 2007-01-04 00:00:00 | by the_truth | [ Reply to This ]
      i liked this , it gets it,s message over clearly.
    Look at us,
    on any god given day,
    there's nothing left,
    but repeated piano tunes,
    hockey victories
    and pitty sunday fights.

    the verse above, i liked most.images of the family sitting drinking tea on the lawn, pretending to be happy, then the [censored]ing starts and everyone explodes. then the " family pet names" nice line, and so true.
    gerry
    | Posted on 2007-01-04 00:00:00 | by bogeyman | [ Reply to This ]


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