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    dots Submission Name: Bluedots
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    Author: Lil gal
    ASL Info:    32/F-ya/here
    Elite Ratio:    3.19 - 355/216/36
    Words: 67
    Class/Type: Poetry/Society
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    Average Vote:    4.0000
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       It's not about the ocean. I want to know what you think it's about.


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    dotsBluedots
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    Deep in you,
    vast sea of blue.

    In your beauty,
    you have no clue.

    Walking on top,
    feeling you through,
    vast sea of blue.

    Shuffled and tossed,
    in this ocean I am lost.

    Tell me what I should do,
    Trying to swim above you,
    my vast sea of blue.

    I fear that I'll just drown,
    my vast sea of blue.




    Submitted on 2007-01-04 18:15:46     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      not the first to say it, but surely its someones eyes, yes? (i'll kick myself if you're a skydiver or something and its about the sky!)

    nice and thought provoking anyway, very dreamy
    | Posted on 2007-04-18 00:00:00 | by Senna27NZ | [ Reply to This ]
      im drunk. im usually drunk. and im colorblind.
    blue is my favorite color. i get it confused with purple all the time, but i love it. blue/ and i work offshore so i see lots of water, which isnt always blue. but i love it. deep seas of blue when i dream its in blue. me and you
    swimming in blue.
    | Posted on 2007-03-31 00:00:00 | by HappyBuddaH | [ Reply to This ]
      gorgues imagery. nice use of words. good flow.
    I like it. Nice contrasting colors and emotions.
    Write on,
    Lanna
    | Posted on 2007-01-22 00:00:00 | by EmeRalDEyeZ5491 | [ Reply to This ]
      that was beautiful imagery. in my interp.I could see you swiming in log strokes, and a gleam sweeping across the water..after reading the comments..i also see the same picture and then a blink of an eye, the water sucks down slightly in the blink and then you resuface again enjoying your swim in the vast sea of blue ;)
    | Posted on 2007-01-15 00:00:00 | by laniejane | [ Reply to This ]
      Blue is a hue of sky.
    liand the last thing I hope to see
    when I die.veary thought porvolking
    | Posted on 2007-01-07 00:00:00 | by invader | [ Reply to This ]
      I could see this describing getting lost in one's eyes. The ocean references need not be taken literally to be effective. I dunno correct me if I'm wrong:)
    | Posted on 2007-01-07 00:00:00 | by fryte | [ Reply to This ]
      I have an awesome ring that changes the hues of blue, green & gold & I ?ink of this

    I hope you are doing great in your life and that you are rockin on girl

    I keep you in my thoughts and prayers and hope all your dreams are made true

    love,
    tif
    smiles 2 share
    | Posted on 2007-01-05 00:00:00 | by Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]
      U made sociaty better then it seems. Like tempting...

    yeahh good write.

    those sneaky little emos....
    | Posted on 2007-01-04 00:00:00 | by DaGrimReaperess | [ Reply to This ]
      I could be wrong..but I'm gonna go with getting lost in the blue eyes of someone..am I right? lol
    thats my first instinct, but good write overall
    ttyl hun :)
    | Posted on 2007-01-04 00:00:00 | by DesecratedDream | [ Reply to This ]


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