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Submission Name: Blue dots

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Author:	Lil gal
ASL Info:	28/F-ya/here
Elite Ratio:	3.19 - 354/212/35
Words:	67

Class/Type:	Poetry/Society
Total Views:	214
Average Vote:	4.0000
Bytes:	426

Description:
It's not about the ocean. I want to know what you think it's about.

Blue

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Deep in you,
vast sea of blue.

In your beauty,
you have no clue.

Walking on top,
feeling you through,
vast sea of blue.

Shuffled and tossed,
in this ocean I am lost.

Tell me what I should do,
Trying to swim above you,
my vast sea of blue.

I fear that I'll just drown,
my vast sea of blue.

Submitted on 2007-01-04 18:15:46 Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  not the first to say it, but surely its someones eyes, yes? (i'll kick myself if you're a skydiver or something and its about the sky!)

nice and thought provoking anyway, very dreamy
| Posted on 2007-04-18 00:00:00 | by Senna27NZ | [ Reply to This ]
  im drunk. im usually drunk. and im colorblind.
blue is my favorite color. i get it confused with purple all the time, but i love it. blue/ and i work offshore so i see lots of water, which isnt always blue. but i love it. deep seas of blue when i dream its in blue. me and you
swimming in blue.
| Posted on 2007-03-31 00:00:00 | by HappyBuddaH | [ Reply to This ]
  gorgues imagery. nice use of words. good flow.
I like it. Nice contrasting colors and emotions.
Write on,
Lanna
| Posted on 2007-01-22 00:00:00 | by EmeRalDEyeZ5491 | [ Reply to This ]
  that was beautiful imagery. in my interp.I could see you swiming in log strokes, and a gleam sweeping across the water..after reading the comments..i also see the same picture and then a blink of an eye, the water sucks down slightly in the blink and then you resuface again enjoying your swim in the vast sea of blue ;)
| Posted on 2007-01-15 00:00:00 | by laniejane | [ Reply to This ]
  Blue is a hue of sky.
liand the last thing I hope to see
when I die.veary thought porvolking
| Posted on 2007-01-07 00:00:00 | by invader | [ Reply to This ]
  I could see this describing getting lost in one's eyes. The ocean references need not be taken literally to be effective. I dunno correct me if I'm wrong:)
| Posted on 2007-01-07 00:00:00 | by fryte | [ Reply to This ]
  I have an awesome ring that changes the hues of blue, green & gold & I †?ink of this

I hope you are doing great in your life and that you are rockin on girl

I keep you in my thoughts and prayers and hope all your dreams are made true

love,
tif
smiles 2 share
| Posted on 2007-01-05 00:00:00 | by Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]
  U made sociaty better then it seems. Like tempting...

yeahh good write.

those sneaky little emos....
| Posted on 2007-01-04 00:00:00 | by DaGrimReaperess | [ Reply to This ]
  I could be wrong..but I'm gonna go with getting lost in the blue eyes of someone..am I right? lol
thats my first instinct, but good write overall
ttyl hun :)
| Posted on 2007-01-04 00:00:00 | by DesecratedDream | [ Reply to This ]

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