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    dots Submission Name: Torturedots
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    Author: Vampiric Death
    Elite Ratio:    2.27 - 133/159/91
    Words: 74
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
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    I dream of the future,
    and live in the past.
    Within me you'll find
    darkness so vast.
    My weakness is love,
    it cripples my mind.
    What wouldn't I give
    for my heart to be blind?
    At the sound of her voice,
    I fall once again.
    I just kick back and wait
    for this love to end.
    I must not tell her,
    she can never know.
    All I can do now
    is torture my soul.




    Submitted on 2007-01-05 08:22:29     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I like this, it's deep, so heart felt, that it seems...makes a girl who knows you kinda feel jealous I guess. Lol...but you always wrote good poems and still do. Luv you.

    Appreciate the Twisted,
    Luv the Death.
    | Posted on 2007-07-30 00:00:00 | by Twisted | [ Reply to This ]
      I love this, I can relate to it so much right now, it's like a description of my inside haha.
    But I guess a lot of people could relate as it's almost a rite of passage to feel like this at some point.
    I like the rhyme scheme too, it's as if you could skip straight through it but you're forced to pause quite a lot, probably not intentional but I interpret it as a metaphor for the feeling your describing - you have to move slowly through it, if you try and fasten up the falling out of love process it's gonna [censored] up.
    Excellent :).
    | Posted on 2007-01-05 00:00:00 | by JLH | [ Reply to This ]


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