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    dots Submission Name: The Wraith Of Tomorrowdots
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    Author: Liv2LoveThePain
    ASL Info:    19 - F - Philly
    Elite Ratio:    4.23 - 1527/1515/256
    Words: 185
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 906
    Average Vote:    5.0000
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    dotsThe Wraith Of Tomorrowdots
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    Another wound you've never noticed dies in your heart.
    Feet grow into shovels on this grave again tonight.
    A few more inches through the dirt and your pulse can start.
    Another wound you've never noticed dies in your heart.

    Another silhouette of forgotten dreams walks by.
    The knife in her chest is almost invisible now.
    Come down from your tower of faith to drown in the lie.
    Another silhouette of forgotten dreams walks by.

    Melt in the flame as the wrath of God swallows
    what once was your skin until light leaves you hollow.
    The wraith of tomorrow
    is no cure for sorrow.
    A hero is only as good as destruction.


    Another starless sky will open above your head,
    but only when you promise not to scream anymore.
    She said, "You won't feel a thing," from her hospital bed.
    Another starless sky will open above your head.

    Another cold surgeon (the same linoleum floor)
    rips away your beating heart to silence one disease.
    Hand your soul to deception, since you couldn't before.
    Another cold surgeon (the same linoleum floor)...




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    ||| Comments |||
      Hmmm. Sounds lyrical to me. It would make a nice song. I like it. Its flow is a bit odd though. The second line in each stanza sort of throws the flow off. But I like it just the way it is. Sing-song-wonderful.
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    | Posted on 2007-01-06 00:00:00 | by dark-red-pain | [ Reply to This ]
      Dearest Guru

    You are wonderful

    This is wonderful

    Everyone should bow down at your feet in worship

    This could be a song

    Steve is an ass

    Tom is mad

    This comment is bad

    I'm gonna go now, but i thought you deserved a comment, even though this one sucks

    Ye Olde Dance Partner
    | Posted on 2007-01-05 00:00:00 | by MyFairCalamity | [ Reply to This ]


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