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    dots Submission Name: Gary Coleman serving drinks, circa 2007dots

    Author: A.L. Beirce
    ASL Info:    17/f/StL
    Elite Ratio:    2.85 - 12/16/8
    Words: 198
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsGary Coleman serving drinks, circa 2007dots

    My success is a broken pool cue
    The top broken off
    And the bottom rolling endlessly on the
    Sticky floor.

    The only thing halfway decent here
    Are the bloomin’ onions.
    Damn! Are they good!
    Love ‘em!

    Girls with bright pink hair tell me lies
    But I look sixteen too.
    Aint no way.
    But when I say no, they’ll just go next door.

    The two cowboys always come in here.
    Only place in New York that cares to stock
    Mason jars.
    New York is the only place
    They can be themselves.

    What was it?
    She was in a movie
    Something about quantam physics.
    I’m not ashamed to admit it went over my head.
    Been sittin’ here,
    Racking my brain
    Ever since that actress came through the door.
    Must not be doin’ to well.

    Everyone here is so lost.
    When the bottle drops,
    The shards of glass shatter, but reflect no light.

    Maybe I’ll turn a lamp on.
    Or not,
    Might ruin the mood.

    “Yo, Gary! When you gonna quit this ‘n go back to Hollywood?”
    I tell them what they want to hear.
    “Watchoo’ talkin’ bout, Willis?”

    Submitted on 2007-01-05 13:55:43     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      i think your poem is really good. i haven,t read something like this on this site before, a nice style you got there, ive got these images of you sitting at the bar, eyeing up the regulars, each have their own story,nice,nice
    | Posted on 2007-01-05 00:00:00 | by bogeyman | [ Reply to This ]

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