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    dots Submission Name: Broken Promisesdots
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    Author: EternallyMystic
    ASL Info:    18-F-Mich
    Elite Ratio:    2.05 - 9/18/25
    Words: 167
    Class/Type: Poetry/Broken
    Total Views: 822
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
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       I wrote this when i caught my love breaking a promise.


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    dotsBroken Promisesdots
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    So here we are again
    Blowing me off for your latest
    Crutch
    Your latest fixx
    Another Raven to replace
    The one that flew-
    leaving claw marks dug into you heart
    I could understand that
    I could hold you and tell you things
    you needed to hear
    But you had to go
    and make her more important than me
    Fuck me over
    for your current cheap thrills
    All grown up now arent you?
    Ready for the rollar coasters
    you think she might be good for
    in the privecy of your own bed
    (or mine if you can get away with it)
    But not this time
    This time
    Im not watching you
    slobber like a junkie over over your newist needle
    And if your willing to through us away
    for some trick
    who prolly wont be around in 5 months
    have fun
    go fuck yourself when shes gone
    As i wont be there to catch you
    when you fall this time.





    Submitted on 2007-01-05 14:03:35     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      whoa i like the way you write comes from the heart tells about your life thats whats so good about writting anyways loved it all over your poem very cool gotta put in on my favs, ty
    | Posted on 2007-01-05 00:00:00 | by ty | [ Reply to This ]


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