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If only I loved You

Author: Ola
ASL Info:    18/f/USA
Elite Ratio:    3.26 - 221 /187 /43
Words: 151
Class/Type: Poetry /Love
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To a Friend!

If only I loved You

If I only loved you
We’d take long walks on the beach
And we’d sit in the sand to eat
You’d be the perfect boy friend
Dropping breakfast in my bed
If only I loved you

If only I loved you
We’d watch the sun set in the sea
And you’d tell me that you love me
You’d hand me flowers everyday
And you would kneel by me to pray
If only I loved you

If only I loved you
We would be the perfect couple
Resolving our every troubles
A kiss only you’d ever get
Like when the wave and sand first met
If only I loved you

If only I loved you
We would get married on the beach
And maybe I’d ask you to teach
A desperate woman how to love
The most perfect guy in the world.
…If only I loved you.

Submitted on 2007-01-05 14:39:06     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  Very well put together with very romantic type images .. very nice the picture of what love could be but a kind of sadness knowing thats not what you want at least not with him.
| Posted on 2007-01-05 00:00:00 | by isis_lenore | [ Reply to This ]
  This is nice, I like the repetitave "If only I loved you" it shows regret and this poem really flows. I see that your a romantic person and that really shows in this poem. Also, its nice how short this is, mine are always soooo long that I can like murder someone with them x.x Anyways, its nice and good luck with more to come!
| Posted on 2007-01-05 00:00:00 | by Sasafraz | [ Reply to This ]

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