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    dots Submission Name: twice as much as yesterdaydots
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    Author: elseibi
    ASL Info:    20/f/uk
    Elite Ratio:    3.13 - 228/180/38
    Words: 53
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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       Just a lil poem: i remembered the "i love you more today than i did yesterday, but not as much as i will tommorow" and kinda built on it. Tell me what ya think and what i can add to it please.. thanks, much love xxx

    ~lou~


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    dotstwice as much as yesterdaydots
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    Today i love you twice as much,
    as i did yesterday,
    i hope and pray with all my heart,
    that in your arms i may stay,

    I love you half as much today,
    as tommorow you can bet,
    steadily my love will grow,
    we'll stay forever, dont you fret.






    Submitted on 2007-01-05 14:41:46     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Sweet poem, Lou. A beautiful poem for a loved one. Good Write! : )
    | Posted on 2007-03-15 00:00:00 | by mdsouza | [ Reply to This ]
      A little short, but I'm not sure it needs to be longer. I think the flow may be slightly off in the first stanza, but that could just be my inner metronome needs repaired. Otherwise (I had to spell that word four times, in case you were wondering) it's a well-done poem. It's good to know that there are still a few people out there who know what it means to find happiness.

    Sayonara.

    --crimson echo
    | Posted on 2007-01-14 00:00:00 | by crimson echo | [ Reply to This ]
      Lucky guy, this! Wonderful little love poem, Lou!
    | Posted on 2007-01-06 00:00:00 | by Ron Cole | [ Reply to This ]
      oh, what a perfect little love poem. i wouldn't add anything. you've said all there really is to say right here.
    to add more now i think will overpower the message. less is more sometimes. i think the shorter ones have more impact, anyway. but thats just me.
    smashing wee poem, love it!
    michelle
    | Posted on 2007-01-05 00:00:00 | by whirl | [ Reply to This ]


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