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When a Boy makes a Girl Jealous


Author: VampireMaiden
ASL Info:    16, Female, USA
Elite Ratio:    2.43 - 23 /31 /29
Words: 252
Class/Type: Poetry /BrokenHeart
Total Views: 3144
Average Vote:    5.0000
Bytes: 1757



Description:


Love, slitting wrists, and blood...


When a Boy makes a Girl Jealous



A boy liked a girl but wanted to make her jealous.

Then one day

things went terribly wrong.

The next few weeks

were like a very sad

song.

He made her jealous

on purpose he tried.

When the girl asked, "Do you love her?"

on purpose he lied.

He played with jealousy

like it was a game.

Little did he know

Things would never be the same.

His plan was working

but he had no clue.

How wrong things would go,

the damage he would do.

One night she broke down,

feeling very

alone.

Just her and the blade,

no one else home.

She dialed his number,

he answered, "Hello"

She told him she loved him

and hung up the phone.

He raced to her

house

just a minute too late.

Found her lying in blood

her heart

had no rate.

Beside her was a note,

in it her confession.

Her love for this boy,

her only obsession.

As he read the note,

he knelt down and cried.

Grabbed her knife,

that night they both died.

She was found in his arms,

both of them dead.

Under her

note

his handwriting said:

"I loved her so, she never knew.
All this time she loved me too."




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  wow! THATS AN INCREDIBLE STORY! I love the way you formatted it and the delivery was damn exceptional. excellence. damn right, keep writing and enjoy@!

-Michael
| Posted on 2008-05-17 00:00:00 | by siroez | [ Reply to This ]
  I'm not a fan of poetry, but I felt compelled to read your submission completely through. I am glad that I did; this poem is very enjoyable... in a tragic sort of way.
| Posted on 2007-04-14 00:00:00 | by hatredsmuse | [ Reply to This ]
  This poem is awesorme its really deep
-cheyenne-
| Posted on 2007-04-13 00:00:00 | by Chafinky | [ Reply to This ]
  ....That makes you want to rip out your own heart just to get rid of the pain.
| Posted on 2007-04-06 00:00:00 | by BrokenAngelKat | [ Reply to This ]
  It made me cry as soon as I read it. This part "Found her lying in blood

her heart

had no rate."

I just began to cry, because I honestly knew where it was going, and the last lines, were just a heart throb. It sort of hurt to read it completely. One of those instant reactions that you don't ever think will happen again.
| Posted on 2007-01-12 00:00:00 | by Karios | [ Reply to This ]
  I thought it was good!
Really rather liked it!
| Posted on 2007-01-08 00:00:00 | by RichieHM | [ Reply to This ]
  Wow, this is really deep, I loved it! It's going on my favorites.
| Posted on 2007-01-05 00:00:00 | by poetic_tragedy | [ Reply to This ]
  oh this is so sad i love it im am going to make this a favorite. this reminds me of me and this boy right now
| Posted on 2007-01-05 00:00:00 | by gloomyanddoomy | [ Reply to This ]


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