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    dots Submission Name: Rest in Peace Boyz (revised)dots
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    Author: theman
    ASL Info:    21/m/mn
    Elite Ratio:    3.52 - 496/478/149
    Words: 319
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Serious
    Total Views: 512
    Average Vote:    4.0000
    Bytes: 1917



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       I added some things Please look at the orginal then look at this one and say which is better even though u might not like. thank u


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    dotsRest in Peace Boyz (revised)dots
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    I've seen more dead bodyís than a mortician
    the thing is though
    half of them r my boyz
    Ask an ANGEL
    let my boyz rest in peace,
    All ANGELZ
    ANGELZ from the north
    ANGELZ from the south
    ANGELZ from the west and east,
    let my boyz rest in peace

    I told dem boyz that day to ride strapped wit there piece.
    But what em I, just another silly white boy
    but when I got that phone call.
    it was to wild
    she got your man on the phone
    he stared frontin
    U said it was notin
    I told u not to fuck wit that boyz trick
    she nothing but a bitch and a snitch
    Now look at u six feet deep
    In a casket who the fuck going to follow u

    This where I guess get the momentum rolling and flowing.
    Wait i'm not done
    I'm coming after u
    Pulling the same gun trigger u pulled on dem.
    I told them demons
    The demons from the north, north east, north west, south, south west, south east, west and east
    not to let your boyz rest in peace.
    Not to let u get wink of sleep
    now waking up wit night sweats
    This is what u get
    Thought u could be a cold killer
    But I can
    I'm on these pills for schizophrenia
    Never seen a white boi go on the fritz
    u don't know what White boyz has to do get street cred wit the crew....
    Now thatís why i'm coming after you
    I'm back once again for revenge,
    In an all-black bulletproof Benz,
    How will I get 'em? It just depends,
    Hook ur ass up with all ur dead friends.

    Now once again
    ask an ANGEL
    let my boyz rest in peace,
    All ANGELZ
    ANGELZ from the north
    ANGELZ from the south
    ANGELZ from the west and east,
    let my boyz rest in peace




    Submitted on 2007-01-05 16:06:59     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      wow, i like how you compare people to angelz
    and you express you view so strongly
    i wish i could hearr the tune that goes with this piece
    DeeDs
    | Posted on 2007-01-21 00:00:00 | by crazymunchkin | [ Reply to This ]


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