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    dots Submission Name: Knowledgedots
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    Author: Lil gal
    ASL Info:    32/F-ya/here
    Elite Ratio:    3.19 - 355/216/36
    Words: 79
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 777
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 516



    Description:
       it's not done yet, but figured y not post it anyway.


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    dotsKnowledgedots
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    I know what you are,
    a traveler from afar,
    following a lone star.

    Seeking knowledge that's so deep,
    making angels sigh and weep.

    Caution on what you learn,
    for it can scar and it can burn.

    Knowledge is power,
    is that what you seek?
    Power can be oh so bleak,
    a havoc upon society it wreaks.

    So place your feet upon the sand,
    and always use a guiding hand,
    my intense blue eyed man.




    Submitted on 2007-01-05 17:22:34     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      I liked it , but I think theres a little to much rhyming?? It might just be me. You said it wasn't done so maybe thats why?
    Thanks for sharing.
    Kelley Frost
    | Posted on 2007-11-17 00:00:00 | by whendt | [ Reply to This ]
      I really enjoy the fix you got on blue.
    It soo veary true
    how the thas'
    ruine grace
    | Posted on 2007-01-07 00:00:00 | by invader | [ Reply to This ]
      i like what you say.
    knowledge is our destroyer,
    im trying to find a way back to the simplicities that knowledge turned so complex.

    you go girl;)
    | Posted on 2007-01-06 00:00:00 | by forfila | [ Reply to This ]
      cool. knowledge can be scary...

    yeahh good write so far let me know when yah done with the whole thing cuZ im curios to find how it ends..


    | Posted on 2007-01-05 00:00:00 | by WD-40 | [ Reply to This ]
      i like it
    interesting
    | Posted on 2007-01-05 00:00:00 | by gloomyanddoomy | [ Reply to This ]


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