Dear Someone.
Just writing to say your heartfelt
pain is all that can
be imagined with me its like
a yesterdays rain pouring
over a bleading heart it stings
but only for a minuet.
I don't know how it begun or
why it started i just know who its
for a friend that i lost
sometime ago if we should dance
apon a rainbow while asleep i know
he is safe and well but to see him again
would be heaven in my eyes of love
filled with pain of losing him again
when i must awake
sweet dreams full of grace and the taste of
sweet temptation that i should want to
stay with him in the peaceful land of
dreams.
While we sleep my hand touches your face
its wet from tears of joy and hope
i must go back i cannot stay any longer
i'll take you back but in my heart
sweet dreams my friend
love your friend always?
keep writing till you gain an interest in putting more time in to your work. while your content is well picked as a subject matter you need time to seal the deal with a breif proofread. luv u xoxoxoxo paulie
Nice job. This conveys some powerful emotions....I had to read it a few times, though. The missing punctuation threw me off a little. Other than that, I thought it was great!
nice and very nice and great... just a way to describe the work u have posted.. to over come writers block hehe u did a great job last few lines where really moving bye
Submission Name: Dear Someone.
